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Subject: Hurm...
Author: La Reina   (Authenticated as La Reina)
Date: January 15, 2012 at 4:21:47 AM
Reply to: here you go (m) by lady murasaki
I did notice your watering down the confrontation, but it does sound somewhat more realistic that way. I especially like the underlining of the wordless ultimatum, even though in the original work I had kept it worded to establish their relationship in the later chapters. But well done, Doc, this is actually pretty good!


Glossary of La Reinaisms

Aheheh: onomatopoeia for a chuckle, esp. a mischievous one
Hurm: onomatopoeia for thinking; a standard reply when all else fails
Spam: an all-purpose word

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