I did notice your watering down the confrontation, but it does sound somewhat more realistic that way. I especially like the underlining of the wordless ultimatum, even though in the original work I had kept it worded to establish their relationship in the later chapters. But well done, Doc, this is actually pretty good!
Glossary of La Reinaisms
Aheheh: onomatopoeia for a chuckle, esp. a mischievous one Hurm: onomatopoeia for thinking; a standard reply when all else fails Spam: an all-purpose word
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