|Subject:||Re: Critique my short story?|
|Author:||Fiammetta (Authenticated as lady murasaki)|
|Date:||June 6, 2012 at 8:01:33 AM|
|Reply to:||Critique my short story? by Rachael|
I think you write well and have potential as a writer, but like RoxStar said, the characters are very flat and the plot's melodramatic. Personally, I have very low tolerance for stories built around a character's repeated traumas, they tend to not be believable and make it look like you're substituting stuff happening to a character to character development. By the time the girl was getting beaten by her mother I was ready to put my hands in my hair.
I don't think you have to trash it, you can use it as a first draft and see how you can develop the characters, and maybe choose a central theme and focus on that.
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