|Subject:||Re: Do I reveal too much too soon?|
|Author:||Billina (Authenticated as Billina)|
|Date:||October 17, 2012 at 3:20:53 PM|
|Reply to:||Do I reveal too much too soon? by JessaRose|
I'm interested in the story, but I think the pacing is a little off. Too much information was given right at the beginning, IMO. Other than that, it wasn't bad. It got my attention, and now I want to know more about Katie and her family.
"An intellectual says a simple thing in a hard way. An artist says a hard thing in a simple way."
"And by the way, dearie, your punctuation sucks canal water!"
-The ghost of Vivian Vance
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