|Subject:||Re: Should I keep writing on this or should I start over?|
|Author:||Julia Elisabeth (Authenticated as Dahlis)|
|Date:||January 2, 2013 at 12:30:18 PM|
|Reply to:||Should I keep writing on this or should I start over? by Kelsey|
I thought it was interesting, a well written start for sure, but personally I like a bit more description in between the lines of a dialogue, especially when it's about tense topics like this. Every now and then, I'd like Payton to look up and scan her sister's face for emotions. But that's just me.
"I'm not lost, I just want you to find me"
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