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Subject: Re: Should I keep writing on this or should I start over?
Author: Fiammetta   (Authenticated as lady murasaki)
Date: January 3, 2013 at 9:22:36 AM
Reply to: Should I keep writing on this or should I start over? by Kelsey
It's well-written but, for my personal taste at least, there's too much dialogue, some of which at the beginning seems a bit slow. Also, I'm confused as to the dad, has he left the family for another woman, is he dying or both?

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