||Re: Does this sound too whiny?
||RoxStar (Authenticated as RoxStar)
||January 6, 2013 at 8:02:21 AM
||Does this sound too whiny? by Julia Elisabeth
She doesn't sound so much whiny as she sounds smug and spoiled. She might not be spoiled but that's how she comes across. Her being angry with her dad for getting drunk is natural, and her being upset over the divorce is believable, but the way she expresses herself does not make her likable at all. She's manipulative too, and that's not likable either.