|Subject:||Re: Does this sound too whiny?|
|Author:||Billina (Authenticated as Billina)|
|Date:||January 6, 2013 at 7:09:16 PM|
|Reply to:||Does this sound too whiny? by Julia Elisabeth|
I think the main character sounds mean, not whiny. The snarling and the "It wasn't hard to lie to someone who was pathetic" line made me think she was too harsh. I understand the character's frustration, but in this piece she comes across as a vicious person, and I really didn't like her. JMO.
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