||Re: Does this sound too whiny?
||Billina (Authenticated as Billina)
||January 6, 2013 at 7:09:16 PM
||Does this sound too whiny? by Julia Elisabeth
I think the main character sounds mean, not whiny. The snarling and the "It wasn't hard to lie to someone who was pathetic" line made me think she was too harsh. I understand the character's frustration, but in this piece she comes across as a vicious person, and I really didn't like her. JMO.
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