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| Subject: | Re: Does this sound too whiny? |
| Author: | Billina (Authenticated as Billina) |
| Date: | January 6, 2013 at 7:09:16 PM |
| Reply to: | Does this sound too whiny? by Julia Elisabeth |
I think the main character sounds mean, not whiny. The snarling and the "It wasn't hard to lie to someone who was pathetic" line made me think she was too harsh. I understand the character's frustration, but in this piece she comes across as a vicious person, and I really didn't like her. JMO.
"An intellectual says a simple thing in a hard way. An artist says a hard thing in a simple way."
-Charles Bukowski
"And by the way, dearie, your punctuation sucks canal water!"
-The ghost of Vivian Vance
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