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Subject: Re: first kiss (read and comment, please :D)
Author: ClementineFox7   (Authenticated as ClementineFox7)
Date: January 18, 2013 at 8:16:33 AM
Reply to: first kiss (read and comment, please :D) by Julia Elisabeth
I really like that the kiss was not magical! That perfect first kiss that makes you feel like your are floating, or whatever, is so boring and cliche. I think Emma sounds very believable. One thing, I wasn't sure of. I'm assuming this is just a paragraph to a larger scene? Because right now it it very confusing who Max is and not knowing they are at a party. But, like I said, I'm assuming this is just part of a larger scene. Good job!

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