|Subject:||well, to be honest...|
|Author:||RoxStar (Authenticated as RoxStar)|
|Date:||June 5, 2012 at 3:13:21 PM|
|Reply to:||Critique my short story? by Rachael|
The writing itself isn't bad, I can see where it's striving for being lyrical.
But the story itself is so melodramatic and over the top tragic that I can't work up any sympathy for the characters. Also so stereotypical/tropey: the beautiful artistic mother, the father who wants a boy, the ugly, friendless redheaded girl who does nothing but write, just very predictable and tired.
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