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Subject: Re: first kiss (read and comment, please :D)
Author: Julia Elisabeth   (Authenticated as Dahlis)
Date: January 18, 2013 at 4:32:26 PM
Reply to: Re: first kiss (read and comment, please :D) by ClementineFox7

Yeah, I was personally quite disappointed with my first kiss - I mean, honestly, how do you expect anything to be performed perfectly when you're super nervous, semi-drunk and new at it?

Yeah, I should have pointed that out, this is like 150 pages into my novel, so it's clear to the reader who Max is and where they are, and so on. It's just a critical place in the novel, so I wanted some feedback on it. :)


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